Bunny rabbit PJs
Chocolate chip ice cream
Fresh out of tissue paper.
One minute your here
The next you aren't
Just like that?
Slinky black dress
Stiletto s on my feet
Swaying to the music
You hold me from behind
Oh sweet heaven.
Crime and injustice
Miles away
Tear slips out anyway.
Twinkling stars fill my vision
The black night surrounds me
It's going to be mornin soon.
Theatre
Throwing popcorn on couples
Definately a blockbuster.
Conversations
Confessions
Alot is happening over coffee.
Everything in technicolor
Senses heightened
It's got to be lust.
*takes a bow*
*gracefully avoids tomatoe shelling*
Ha.
Better avoid those tomatoes. There's gonna be a lot of them...
Those are not haikus!! They are twisted, contorted, destroyed haikus, if any! :(
A haiku has a 5-7-5 syllabic meter, something like:
I chose a path.
It led me nowhere, and now,
I stand corrected.
Please re-submit your haikus.
Shri.
yea i was gonna say the exact same thing as the dude above me.
5-7-5
dont forget
hehe...guess what,someone really doesn't know everything :D
@all : bleddy people. it's DOESN't have to be 5-7-5. It can have max of 17 syllables in 3 lines.
pah.
Buggers.
Yours forever sthupitly.
aah...now this is something close to humour...*clap clap*
and these definitely aren't haikus...and no we aren't jealous of your ability to churn out crap :P
Pah. What is it with you and my sense of humor.
And your breaking my heart love, be careful.
Yours forever sthupitly.
P.S : Pay close attention to the changes in the post.
*Sigh*
Why do you have to throw down the gauntlet? Why?
Ok, here's Wikipedia:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Haiku
"Japanese haiku are typically written as a single line, while English language haiku are traditionally separated into three lines"
And here's an entire study dedicated to haiku:
http://www.ahapoetry.com/haiku.htm
Notably the second link titled "Another Definition of Haiku - Jane Reichhold" Follow that, and in the 8th para, you get:
"In Japanese a haiku is traditionally 5-7-5 sound syllables."
The splitting of 17 syllables into more than 3 lines was usually done to identify the caesura, but that is just a tool. Keeping a haiku in the traditional 5-7-5 format is where the fun lies.
Women. Sigh.
Cheers.
Shri.
P.S : Pay close attention to the changes in the post
What changes?
There aren't any yet.
:P
Shri.
Sigh.
I really liked some of this stuff I came up with.
Pah.
Yours forever sthupitly.
Hmm... I agree with the whole 5-7-5 syllables being haiku... but lemme tell u, when u read all of em together, it's so abstract that it's not bad at all.. :P
And I liked em all cept the first one... tht's too abstract for my taste...
Bttr luck next time, sweetheart.. :P *Hugs*
They aren't haiku. Pay attention to the post, not the other comments.
'Glad you liked them. Though I'm not too sure you did, considering all the tongue showing.
Sigh.
Yours forever sthupitly.
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
5-7-5
5-7-5
5-7-5
5-7-5
5-7-5
5-7-5
5-7-5
5-7-5
Remember it!
Sorry about the blabberibbish(Blabber-gibberish)! But ur hikus are like a blow to the back of my head with a lime coated gold brick in a purple velvet cloth hanging from the end of a spaceship! But hey! U seem to enjoy them. Keep writing. Xcept... Dont publish em. Human beings read it.. Lol.
As always
Darkly in the light
who? where? humans here? on this blog?
Oh shoo.
Yours forever sthupitly.
P.S : Nice to have you back!!
Aaaargh!!!
You changed it!! Not fair!!! You are not supposed to *edit* the post. You are only allowed to post updates and/or typos!!
But that's strange, I distinctly remember my feed reader had the previous version.
Tell me did you republish or save the post, after editing it??
me is sorry for the earlier rude comment....didn't intend to break anything.
and the sentences aren't bad...though some are weirdly isolated...definitely though they aren't haikus...all the best with writing more of them
take care
p.s: hope i am forgiven
@ bs : Lol. It's one of the perks of knowing the password to this account!
I just published it after making the changes.
*shows tongue*
@ nav : You are??!! You're forgiven. And you WERE rude, and you didn't hear it from me.
They are, really.
Thanks for dropping by you guys, it's nice to see more than my comments on my posts on my blog after ages!!
Yours forever sthupitly.
I had a bee
I coloured it yellow
And then it flew away
I made a limerick generator :D
http://www.dustyant.com/posts/limerick-generator-part-i.html
thank you. i know i'm good.
@ pravin : Somehow, the only thought i'm thinking (yeah, we here, all have a flair for the language) that that's absolutely orignal. Can't shame the limerick generator with this one.
Yours forever sthupitly.
Hmmm, that's weird.
I did not receive the updated feed. Or may be it was replaced. Either case, it's gone. So cheers.
Oh, and BTW, good thoughts. Weird feelings, but that's okay, I guess...
Cheers!
Shri.
It'd better be okay. Thankus.
Yours forever sthupitly.
Lol. Sry to get back so late but I did like em... most of em anywayz.. :)
*Hugs*
Thankus. I guess. I'm not apologizing. I loved the utterly haphazard way I've written in :)
All my love.